Unfinished Story

So sad. I really like this though. How it's all laid out like a story. Very different and new. Nice work and take care darling.

"False truthes and lies"
the plural of truth is "truths"

"This stories previous closing"
it should be "story's," since you're talking about ownership.

This was a pretty good poem. I thought the lines were a bit short, so the rhyme scheme was a bit tedious since there weren't enough syllables inbetween rhyming words. I thought the rhythm was pretty good. Any improvement to this poem would probably involve a change to the rhyme scheme and an overhaul concerning the syllables per line. It was a good poem.

Hey, this is good...i can kinda relate to this, it hurtz i know..*hugz* hope ur alrite, keep on writing and take care..
~Luv Alwayz Knoxy