OMG that was soo brilliant! the end just paints the perfect picture and i understand it so clearly! Very sad, worth a million, but given a 5! Thanks for commenting mine!

Ana*

i really like that one its very good i hope u write more soon! well ttyl byeye

That was really... sad. It's very well written but I was so taken with the story that I hardly saw much else. In all honesty I don't understand wanting to end your life, especially when you have something to live for, as it seems your character did. The only thing that was missing was the reason for the sadness.

very deep and meaningful. hope to hear more from you as this was sooo good 5/5. well done

nice job keep it up 5/5 thanks for your comment

bri||iant poem ('',) i liked it very much, it was very creative...keep it up x

wow, thhis is awesome, thx for the comment 5/5

dont kill your self i mean if you go then whos poems will i read you touched my heart now you'll have to live if only for the sake of one last reader thanxz for the comment

hey u commented on my poem "in the darkness" i just wanted to say a huge thanx 4 that coz u have no idea how much feedback means to me. especially with that poem. i like ur poems they flow really good n i especially like this one. good work. keep it up.
Emmah xoxo

Wonderful poem
i love this part
"Its me against me, my own little war
My lips begin to turn blue
I drop to the floor"
your words flowed nicely and had plenty of emotion
nice work

Excellent!

Very good poem. The words are powerful and stunning. Keep it up and thank you for your comments on my own. 5/5

You put so many emotions in so few words
this is truely amazing work
the end just paints up the rest of the story
keep it up
xxxx

Nice work! me against me my own little war.......it gave me goosebumps.

OMG this poem is really deep....i loved it...kinda sad but you painted the picture nicely!!! 5/5