i loved ur last stanza.. it summed up the piece pretty well.. i love this line "and you're not worth this pain".. that was wonderful.. it had its own music without the rhyme.. stay strong
keep up the talent
nouna
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I think this will make an incredible song. I wish I could sing so I could imagine it as a song. Good subject, very deep and powerful! Take Care! Brooke~

Awwl.. very sweet. I loved it, Nice flow and perfect ending. I hope you showed them this because its great. Had me from begining to end 5/5!~ BRitBrat

This one I liked alot, got a good, nice flow up while reading it:)

best wishes,
Patrik

wow...that reminds me of what ive been going through. good job i really liked that

comment on my poem do you want please, it would mean alot to me :) <3<3

wow i came in here 2 return the favor of commenting on ur poems and say thanku 4 commenting on mine but this poem right here got the best of me its really good and i can relate alot keep up the good work and im in the process of writing a part 2 onto my poem right now

Thats really deep and your great at writing. I hope everything gets better for you.

Very good poem it flows very well and has a great structure.

Wonderful job on this poem, it has a good rhymthe going on. I can relate to this poem really well. Keep up the great work.