Hospital Love

by Renee   Aug 12, 2005


And with her last breath,
she whispered to death
"don't let him follow me."

And the IV machine sang a sad song
as she did a silent dance.
Her heart beat stood still.
He couldn't bare that last glance.

So his fingers closed her eyelids,
and he gently took her hand from his,
and their lips met breifly for the last time...
He could've sworn he felt those butterflies.

-*-I've just realized that most of my love poems are about one of them dying. kinda scary.-*-

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  • 18 years ago

    by Natalie84

    Why is it so morbid....that's horribly sad! It seemed to me he really fell in love with her right before she died....that is horrible COONAY! Ugh....that sent shivers down my spine. Write something happy....with a happy ending. Okie dokes...I got some catching up to do...NEXT

  • 18 years ago

    by ASPHYXIATED

    aww. I know this is sad but some bits like the butterflies were just so nice :)

    well done..the flow was good and it just worked i guess?

  • 18 years ago

    by ChevyCowgirl23

    umm... wow this is a VERY good poem!! honestly it is! 5/5
    Amanda

  • 18 years ago

    by Not Bulletproof

    Wow, this was very creative and well written. I loved it. I think maybe you should add in how she died, or why she did, like, why was she in the hospital? I think it would add a little something, but it is brilliant as is. Magical, and I'm sure it happens. <3 Love you Renee, you're amazing hun. xoxoxox

    -Mortalidaga
    xxTakeCarexx

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