wow. thats so good and really moving. i like the image of a fountain. and the rhyming works well. awsome poem

Matt

Coool !!! well written.. power full meaning.. good work. there is something in it... which is pulling my curiousity..any way.. i would love to read more of you.. all the best ~regards~

You asked so here I am!:) your peom is amazing I wish I could write like this! Keep Up the good work.

Jenn aka Pure silence:)*see I can smile...*

I really liked the poem, it flowed really well. I particularly liked the last stanza; "A crimson fountain slowly appears
Releasing out her locked up fears
Her broken body lay on the floor
My angel will be in pain no more" . Nice. The last verse was fulled of emotion expecially as you put "My angel" I felt it made the whole poem more personal. Nice. 5/5

Full* of emotion sorry not fulled.

'She bare not leave him"
I think you mean "dare" not "bare," heh, slight mistake.

Okay, I thought this was a remarkably good poem for the rhyming scheme. Under most circumstances, the rhyme scheme you used is very constricting, but I think the story flowed well. The poem reminded me a bit of the Greek Myth about Persephone and Hades, up until the last stanza. It was good, especially at the end. The last stanza is the sort of grande finale you'd hope out of a poem like this.

wow that was really good and u also keep writing ur a natuaral

I really enjoyed reading your poem. Great job!

you are very good too& thanks for the comment.. I will definietly keep reading your stuff

Wow this is great :) keep it up 5/5

Wow...im totally impressed by your writing. i think your very amazing.what i liked about your poem was that it was very real. i loved that!!! my poem was nuttin compared to yours!!!keep up the great work. thank you so much for commenting on my poem..

Hey hunn. as i promised i am now reading it and OMG!!! its sooooooooo nice I LOVE IT. but after i read it i began to wonder if u r alright u know its been a long since the last time we talked so plz plz just tell me if u r alright sweetie.

At last i wanna say that i rele miss u sweetie and i rele miss talkin to u. u av no idea how i am so lost without u.

Hey!!! omg this is sooooooo good! u have crazy talent. i read some of your other poems and just had to put u in my favorites. if ur the type of person that usually comments on poems, well someone all mine got deleted so i just had to make a new account and stuff so dont bother on commenting i havent put anything up yet lol. but yah great job!!!! 5/5 for sure.
Hugs N' Kisses,
x-xBrOkEnSoUlx-x

Awww this is sad. its extremly well written too. i like the last verse thing the most. very good 5/5

I really liked it. It was good. Thanks for commenting on my poem Gone. It meant a lot to me.

Lovely poem, bub. Your choice of words is magnificent and so well strung together. Also, thank you SO much for the lovely comment on my poem.

Dood that is one of the coolest poems i have ever read!!! you are in my faves, i might have told u befor, but oh well. i love your writing, it so enchanting!!!

stand strong--

I liked the flow... very good poem... 5/5... read some of ur poem =) i can relate very well... thank u for the comment =) much appreciated...

much love
***letishia***

Amazing as always...

Hey there. brilliant poem. i loved stanza 3. so very true. great write