Omg.........omg........thats so powerful!! it made me cry! TT.TT 5/5 definately~! keep it up! XXXXX
JL

Well...I liked this poem, although you switched your subject from first person to third (which is somewhat confusing)...

"As I Watch The Blood
Pore From Among My Head"
(From and Among are both prepositions, why are they right next to each other? I would suggest taking either "from" or "among" out because they are both unnessecary to use right next to each other)
"I Was In a Hospital Bed
The Doctors Were Shocked
At All The Blood I Bleed"
(Bleed should be Bled, if you want it to rhyme)

I enjoyed this poem, it was very suspenseful. Good job.

So graphically portrayed, allot of attention to detail. Good write.

Warmest regards,

Steve

A wonderful write...... heartfelt, very sad. Love how you portrayed the monster....... Alot of detail, keep up the good work.

Smiles, Hugs and Love, Angela

So true. Alcohol changes people and their personalities. They do not realize who they hurt or why. Talking to them in that state is like talking to an alien. They don't understand. Great write.

Pete

Wow that was really an amazing piece of poetry. it flowed really good, it all came together i really enjoyed it. if you have time could you read my poem, "Nobody Like You" ? if not than i'll completely understand. great work though!

That was amazing
great work. i agree with steve...very graphic.
take care x x x

Omg this is so sad....i hope this didnt happen to you ='( well i love the poem.....i love it your a good writer and very talented...you shou8ld go somewhere with this. love JOANN

Omg thats soo sad... its really good
i really liked it.... put a tear in ma eye
keep up the good work
- xXlostXx

Wow!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!that was amazing......check out my poem "daddy where are you" you're a great writer!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!keep it up

xotaeyannaxo

That was amazing realy amazing i loved it good job

Wow... that made my eyes water and me get the chills.. i don't think thats ever happend before to me while reading a poem.. this poem was really really good, it is the type of poem that catches the readers attention and grasps onto it making us want to read even more.. I read this poem 3 times already.. again because it was so good.. awesome job, 5/5

That was an excellent poem! Bravo. Keep up the great work!

-Taylor

I loved the poem!! It kept me in suspense O.O

*Net Hugs* Thanx Alot Angel xoxo-Nikki-xoxo

NOW THAT IS AMAZING. i got goosebumps. thats very good. 5/5