Now that's true poetry..amazing. idk what exactly it is..the words you use..the style...well all of it probably. I think it's neat how it doesn't have the constant rhyming but still flows so well. I've tried but mine always end up rhyming the whole way through. and yeah this reminds me of mine a lil too cause of the "three words". well great poem keep it up!
Christina

This is an amazing poem about relationships i loved the words you used to express the feelings of a break up i honestly think you could go profesional and most poeple on this site cant great job loved it and love all your stuff, wow

I like how you set it up...the piece has uniqueness...and very nice word choice.

Can't come up with anything negative about it.

Take care.

xxx

Yeah your amazing

that space was all an illusion,
a second look would confirm it.

But she never thought to look twice.

that was like magic i swear that was so good your a really smart person to come up with something so pretty like that

the only part i kinda thought was weird...was like the last stanza i think before the one line....and at the beggining i think the first four lines seemed to rhyme which i thought was odd but maybe it wasnt intended too i dunno

good job...5/5

I get it! I get it!

It's clever but I don't feel as smart since you kind of pointed it out. lol

No, I really think you have a great poem here.

That was cool and unique 5/5

I really like this poem, I love your creativity, I love the depth in which you went in to write this poem. However, I have a few things that I would like to point out:
"Three, two, one" a very interesting concept, the only thing that made me unsure about it was that you used "twice" instead of "two" (yes, it is obvious, but didn't follow the pattern) and in the last line you had both "one" and "two" in it. This made me try and find "three" although there was none. I think you should rewrite the last line, possibly without the "two", that way your use of layers and hidden meanings would be clearer. Just a suggestion.

At first, I thought the last three words would obviously be "I love you" but then as I continued reading the poem, I was actually hoping that you would write three unusual words, something different.

But, I'm just making these suggestions because when I REALLY like a poem, I enjoy analysing it. You could be a true poet with such literary devices. Such unusual talent, I'm gonna read more from you!

Yea.... i found the meaning in between the stanzas... clever. i spotted only two mistakes in this one: 'reveling' should be 'revieling' and these two sentances confused me a bit; 'She lived in constant confusion,
flying with the stride of sureness.' how can you be confused, but fly with a stride of sureness? that sounds awkward and takes away the meaning of that part of the poem.

Wow! i loved it. seriously, i liked the three, two, one thing. thats awesome!