Great, just great. Sad. 5!

Hey, another good poem, i hope you pull through. you're a tough person, you'll make it.

Aww i'm sorry, i hope your okay, your also a great poet, this is another great one but don't do anything stupid, because i'm sure theres other people out there that really want you to be okay not just your ex, great job, 5/5

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(")-(") Amazing Ash! (")-('')

( )_( )* lol!
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Wow...very well written! it was awesome, the flow, the way its written, the emotion, it was all PERFECT, it was definately a read, 5/5

Hi! thanks for checking out my poem.. I voted a 5 on this one =D hugs

Thats really sad, aaaaaaaaaaaw i feel sorry for you, good poem u shd give it to him :p

Gr8 poem babe its so sad thxx 4 my coment feel free 2 coment on more this poem is gr8 5/5

Great job! keep it up

Aww im sorry this happened to you!! I hope everything becomes ok!!!
BTW nice poem!!

It was fantastic, but I feel guilt for taking pleasure in your tragedy.
Keep on writing!

It was fantastic, but I feel guilt for taking pleasure in your tragedy.
Keep on writing!

Sad deep poem.
keep ur chin up:)

Jacs
xxx

Because of loves game
loves should be love's
the second segment is very ify, you break the lines in the middle of the sentance, and that just doesn't go well.
'anything I am so weak.'
should be 'anything, I am so weak.'
a lot of missing commas.
some one
sould be someone
when;
no semmicollen needed, nor a comma.
and I am,
sure forever’s
broke it again, and the comma is not a good substitute.
the very last line isn't a good closeing.
not bad, the subject was good, the flow was ify, 3/5

Hey! thanx for commenting on my poem it meanz so much to me...and i can definetely relate to this one soo much! *hugz* i hope ur alrite..keep ur head up...hopefully everythingz workz out for the best...take care, keep on writing, this was truly amazing..5/5
~Luv Alwayz Knoxy

This is good, but I think the rhythm needs a bit of work to make it easier to read.

Oops didn't mean to press enter.'My heart is braking because of loves game' I liked this line a lot. Should be 'breaking' though. Good poem overall.
Sarahx

This was good though the flow was kinda off alot 4/5