Lonely? That's the way that I feel right now....:-( really touching an dcute poem. Nice job 5/5 take care and keep it up.

I love the flow it kicks @$$. amazing i love the last few lines keep up the good work
5.5

Very good work

Okay lets see

1st stanza: good until the last line

2nd stanza: was my least favorite needs work

3rd stanza:amazing....seriously i mean that really good

4th stanza: completly lost and confused me it rhymed and flowed wonderfully but confusing none the less which is okay, im okay with being confused poetry isn't always meant to be understood

so overall 4/5 could using a little touching up!

Needless to say, wonderful poem. Though some touches might make it perfect, it is still wonderful. You are an excellent writer. Keep it up!

Very good girl. Your poem was just great, very descriptive, and I like it. Keep it up! But, youcan still make it better. Jamie gave some good advice.

Very good. the title went good with the poem.

Ooo, thems fightin' words, arent they? nice poem, i like the ryming scheme you used. 5/5

I really liked this poem alot. I mean i have a story about this actually that just reminded me of it. Well today i go to two different schools for different things and today because i take Graphic Disign and this girl name Helena not even kidden she told me how her friend backstabbed her and stuff last year so now she has no friends at all at her normal school and i feel so bad so i'm trying to help now but this poem just reminded me of that. But anyway amazing job. keep it up. keep on writing. love always and forever.

I just spelled that wrong oopps...Design lol sorry

Wow.. this was pretty amazing, too.. i lykd r topic, not many i hv checked out wer about this kind of friendship or from this perspective.. i lykd ur rhyme
keep goin

I really it. You did a great job on this one too. I totally understand how you feel, I can relate to this. It stinks. I'm sorry you have to feel this way. Keep your head up. Take care.
> Kiesha

"A friend is like a parachute,
if they weren't there for you the first time
chances are .. you won't be needing them again.
"

Cute, i liked it alot.
xxx cici xxx

This so accurately depicts the feeligns of loneliness, longing, etc.. meter and flow was great...i realy dont have much critique, regretfully.. but i did really like this.. keep writing for sure.. im not homeright now, but id be glad to read more once i get home.. pZ out =O)

Very good nice flow to it you are very good.5/5

I think you did a good job, i know how that feels, its a terrible feeling.. my mom keeps me in a cage that i call home all the time, and i have no one to talk to or hang out with, so its very lonely, and i have to stay in a very small room, all by myself because my brother gets me introuble, this poem was really true, i can relate to it alot, good job, 5/5

This poem really spoke to me because I've been at that point in my life for quite a while. Nice work, I like the ideas, continue to explore them and try for some more descriptive line. Great job!

Nice flow