Comments : Waken Up

  • 14 years ago

    by amelia

    5/5 but why u writing all bout suicide... ?

  • 14 years ago

    by midnight♥lullibys

    This was alright...i didnt like the last 2 lines in the first stanza...they seemed forced ....but the rest was alright good job

  • 14 years ago

    by Jamie

    Drops into the ground.
    and makes a huge sound.

    what importance does that serve? can you pick this poem apart and tell me what it means or are you writing blindy things that sound cool?

    and i will never be waken up.
    as you kiss me for the last time.

    those are my favorite lines those i think meant something real the rest of the poem is simple just ranting about cutting and suicide and i dont think thats all that important love and losing is though and i think those lines were worded well

    need work...

  • 14 years ago

    by amber

    Yup me too can relate i like it keep it up

  • 14 years ago

    by Carmen

    Better than the other of yours i have read. i like it a lot. it seems like you've went threw serious heartbreak. i can completely empathize w/ that

  • 14 years ago

    by Ashlee Nicole

    I like how You feel no need to rhyme what so ever...I think It's very bold when someone can write in that manner...It takes a lot of creativity..Props 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Andrea

    Eh it gave me chills. i could picture that...gross lol. good poem tho, i liked how you gave details for the reader.

  • 13 years ago

    by AlexJ

    A very good and sad poem. I like the flow! Nice job!

  • 13 years ago

    by Puerto_Rican_Chick

    Craziness... nice job!!!! i like it.

  • 13 years ago

    by Jerry Scott

    You write like Picasso paints. Very different, very good. I give you 5++

  • 13 years ago

    by xX-jess-Xx

    I liked it...although, some of the rhyming did seem a little forced. but on the whole i thought it was very good considering i dont really like poems about suicide. but u r a great writer, keep it up! jesx

  • 13 years ago

    by Juls

    Intense..but amazing! I know what you are talking about i understnad the whole cutting thing but im trying to stop. if u need to talk im here for you

    Juls

  • 13 years ago

    by Samantha

    Wow... i really liked this... although i'm not a big fan of suicide poems this was very good and very well written.. keep it up

    sammie