That wos a really really good poem ,
you have a lot of skill
5/5 by far
sarah x x x x

HAHAHA! You said "even using rakes"! But beside that pathetic line (probably ELOC)everything esle rock my knitted boxer shorts. My favourite lines are:

"And all the while, they still laugh,

At the pain you feel with open eyes,

And close them just to find,

The one's that love you, Behind closed eyes."

You but me to shame with your rhymes *snicker*

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(")-(") Arrivederci!

I was basically thinking the same thing as Atomic...
The general idea is beautiful...I love the ending.

Keep it up.

xxx

Once again, awesome write
don't stop writing, you're amazing.
alyssa