You....

by whitney   Sep 22, 2005


You look at me like i am so beautiful
when there are so many other pretty girls

you kiss me with such an intensity
that it makes my head spin

you touch me with so much controlled passion
that i tremble with anticipation

you make love to me with such tender care
that it brings tears to my eyes

you love me with all your heart
and i know you are the other half to my one part!

plz vote and comment would mean alot!thx for reading
***i kno it sucks, it doesn\'t rlly make sense, it was juss a spur of the moment thing***

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  • 18 years ago

    by XxCrazy4youxX

    ~*That was beautiful, i loved it keep up the work 5/5*~ XoXo

  • 18 years ago

    by Jamie

    It dosn't suck...it makes sense....but it is simple and plain and there are no advanced words...i think your a great writer with great ideas but a better vocab and maybe a different formet on your poem would work better...just thoughts 4/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Gesselle Valle

    Nice poem Whitney...can't wait to read more...take care and keep it up 5/5

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