Amazingly written.. 5/5 for you..

Wow, that was...kind of strong.
I liked it, though. Very dark.
Um, the only "mistake" I picked up was probably the titles, were it said Angels and Animales. Maybe you wanted it to be that way, but usually its spelt Animals, without the E.
But of course, that is just a matter of style.
Good writing!
beth.

Oo very sensual this is good! I like your ability to write a well flowing poem, without a rhyme scheme. This is a very powerful poem, but for a reason I can't put my finger on. One suggestion, It's hard to follow your train of thought, which makes the poem confusing, and takes away from the overall inpact. good job overall!

I liked the not rhyming aspect of this poem there were many metaphors i think so this could be taken many different ways...very cool....

masked leaders tremble no rebellious assault
change in tide walls will fall in turn

those lines were so neat i loved them your so descriptive your vocasb is amazing i have nothing to bad to say 5/5

From what i'm getting from this poem, im guessing its about war. i think you should place commas and semicolons because a lot of the sentances are hard to read because they just run on, without any separation. its hard to tell whether they're seperate items or all one thing, but i think i found the places that commas and semicolons should've been added. otherwise, nice poem. i loved all the description and different objects of pain and misery you've described. very nice.

Great job the flow could use some work but i love the part where you said "DISAPPEARING DISAPPROVING DESPITE last DEFENSE"...that was really cool...5/5

I absolutely love this. I could picture someone reading that in a poetry reading or something to that effect. It says a lot about life. It's like everything flows together perfectly, but its not at all about the same thing. Great job on this Dave.

Take Care,
Renee

Interesting title you have here really caught my eye. The imagery was fantastic and the metaphors were great. Good job~mel