My Favorite Song

by Renee   Oct 2, 2005


You remind me of a pause in my favorite song
where the music is gone, and the voices are swept
all that's left is a soft breath
before the next line begins.

And every change in tone paints a picture of your laughter
all those sappy ever afters
that mean nothing, but it's something more
than four a.m. as I'm slipping out your front door

And have I told you?
when your lips hit mine and those cymbals chimed
in my mind the music playing was screaming your name
like this may be the last time your ears hear the truth again.

When our hands locked and noone was there to play the guitar
my heart was strumming soft lullabies to yours
do you feel the strings being softly tugged?
Please tell me you do, tell me there's music whispering in your head too.

-*- When I re-read this it seemed to me like it was put together quickly and sloppily...probably because it was. I had the idea in my head all weekend, this is just what I've come up with off the top of my head. Maybe I'll re-enter this when it's not five o'clock in the morning and I've had some coffee.-*-

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  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    This is so unique and filled with greatly portrayed emotions. Every stanza simply sings for me, with it's beautiful descriptions and very original tone.
    My favorite part is:

    -You remind me of a pause in my favorite song
    where the music is gone, and the voices are swept
    all that's left is a soft breath
    before the next line begins.-

    Amazingly written!

  • 18 years ago

    by Candy Gurl

    It's a cool poem. Specially knowing that every one has that special song about some one.

  • 18 years ago

    by Kimeko Lancaster

    This poem is amazing!! I like the way you potray love as a song. because a lot of songs make you think of love. Great Job!!

  • 18 years ago

    by BECLiKEW0AHH

    Aww. thats a really cute poem.. i loved it. 5/5 bec x.x

  • Aw, i really like this. I think it reads well and not in the slightest bit sloppily !!!

    xxx cici xxx