This is superb! I like the format, it's unlike anything I've ever seen. Surprisingly, the flow wasn't faltered by such an unusual format.
The imagery you conveyed in this is mind boggling! Definitely 5/5~Holly

Good structure. Very different from a lot of things on this site. Makes it very effective. Incredible poem with a really good use of vocabulary.
Well done
Sarah x

Very effective blend of style and substance. Love this:

Destroy each precious sapphire mountain
Spill innocents blood in ruby red fountains
Rain arrows upon each enemies child
Keep the insane, kill the mild

Dark and powerful!

"Pain
Spreading throughout towns
Mothers weeping for lost children
Wilting like flowers
In the sun
Alone"

love those lines! i like the style you used for this poem it's very different and it works well with such a great dark poem! well done!

~Jacklyn

Coohl!
i like the way you wrote this, it's really original! 5/5

Nice work

Wow...jsut....wow...this was excellent...5/5 i loved the flwo