OMG I LOVE THIS im a sucker for dark poems its true but this one was so freakin awsome!! i just lvoed it it draws you in from the beginning and gives me the feeling kinda of some hard rock emo song....i lvoe it 5/5

Nice job love the flow wish i havd that flow keep up the good work 5.5

Another great write

Wow ! this is the best one of urs that i read.. is lovely..i love this one
its so strong,intense & dense
so dark,
nice rhmy
perfect flow
5/5
love
amy

This was a very good poem. I really liked it. 5/5 definitely! Awesome job. One minor grammatical error I noticed:

"that your already dead."

I think you meant you're* instead of your

My favorite stanza was the last one:

"But I've only just begun
and I'm starting to unwind
I'm still a morbid child
with a distraught mind."

It's good. And it's a nice way to wrap it all up. Good job. I enjoyed reading this. Keep writing!
Love always,
~BJ~

This poem is really good, has beautiful lines, I really enjoyed it, keep writing.

Wow i really love these sick poems...love them...A black old heart
and a soul to match, thats my favorite line it sounds very good.

another dead soul
to through on the fire.

did you mean throw?

well this definatly deserved another 5/5 and if i love the next one i do of yours, your going on my favs. great job

Well-written and it flowed well, for that I give you 5/5. I just don't like that type of poems..mm I don't know, just bothers me I guess.

Nice job in a writing sense ;)

Saiya

O my god...wow...dang this is soooo beautiful...no need for any lies...u truly are the best,...i did read ur poems in the past...and they r the bomb...5/5 on this one

Ouch..how dark can it get?
I hope you don't REALLY feel that way..

Good Writing!
beth

Amazing poem, i hope you're writing even more like this 1

xXx

Wow this is disturbing but in a powerful, good way.

'I might want you again
so I hid you under my bed
I don't even care
that you're already dead.'

The mystery in this stanza is compelling making you read on. Really loved reading this.

Doesn't sound that much freaky to my M'Dear.

Very nice. =)

( )_( )
(='.'=)
(")-(") Arrivederci!

That's creepy, wow, I hope all of your poetry isn't dark, but then again I do, because this is awesome!

Omg.. that was so dark... lykd the way u ended teh poem, using the same first stanza... powerful words.. agen
keep it up
Nannoush

Excellent. u have a gift. i hope u use it. 5/5!
~*Who Cares?*~

I love this poem!! Very powerful..and again it reminds me of a Zombie song.

Eekk I like this stuff lol good job! I'm ah puttin u on my favs list! Hmm.. Advise... again lol More Commas and Periods other then that... it rocks!

Exceelent job. 5/5

You are an awesome writer

To my fav.'s you go

Wow, again, an intense poem! i loved it.
**lisa**