This is amazing and the two lines at the end are really effective. you've grasped the concept perfectly. im jealous lol i can never get the emotional through if i try n write about death. the closest ive got is ''you were all that i could see''. this poem is brilliant keep up the good work ^_^

Whoa. This Poem talks to me, i know how u keep as i keep reading your poem. Your a really good writier ^^' Lol well ttyl Byez *waves*

Its pretty damn good....
I like your style...
But dont let it go!!!
Ur perfect love is waiting for ya.....

Very very good poem. absolutely beautiful. i really love the repitition of the title as the last two lines, it works fantastically and is a really strong finish to geat poem. keep it up.

Thanks for the comment on mine and that poem was good, i am sure glad someone understands me and my pain, i will keep reading your poems because i feel we have something in commen, thanks again for the comment

If you want it...then do it...i mean to stand beside ur fiancee and make him proud...so sweet...and that's not a dream...it's a nightmare...i think your dream is to be with your fiancee...till death do you part...right?