P A T R I C I A

by aaron c s   Oct 18, 2005


Pay close attention to those beautiful blue eyes,
And how her hair gently caresses her face.
Take a look at her lips when she says hi.
Raise your head to watch her grace.
I must tell you she sure looks good.
Catch her eye and watch her move.
I don't know how I could be with anyone but her,
And everything can just get better

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  • 18 years ago

    by Jamie

    This is so sweet i really get jealous when i read good love poems because i can't write them lol but this was really sweet and i hope whoever she is got to read this...but yeah great flow and rhymes...5/5 again

  • 18 years ago

    by Britney

    Awwl.. very sweet. I loved it, Nice flow and perfect ending. I hope you showed them this because its great. Had me from begining to end 5/5!~ BRitBrat

  • 18 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    I love acrostic poems, especially love acrostic poems. It's a short poem so I can't really go into that much detail, but I'll do my best. I liked how on each line you described something else about her. Acrostic poems can become repetitive and loose flow because of the restrictions, however I think you did quite well. The only line that seems forced is the last line. I say forced because you wrote "An angel she is" and this isn’t how it would be in normal speech. It should be, "she is an angel." But of course this wouldn't fit in with the acrostic form. A short but very sweet poem. I'm sure Patricia is a very lucky girl.

  • 18 years ago

    by Truest Lies

    Looks aren't everything, but it WAS a nice poem.

    Good Writing!
    beth

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