Broken Up!! (revised)

When I think of you hurting
I feel it deep down inside
I become broken and alone
Always comparing me to you

I start to cry the suppressed tears
My fake smile melting away
My happiness displaced as I write
I want to die, make it go away!

I scream and shout, I write it out
Never to be heard by you
My heartfelt words written
My pain begins to ease away

Till next time, Im happier this way

Plz comment I have two versions of this poem so read both then comment/rate on the one you like the best and which ever has the most will stay on this site the other will be deleted!!! Thanx(help from Pure Silence on the revised version)