My Multi-Coloured Patchwork Quilt

by Daniel J   Oct 27, 2005


And in my coloured fantasy,
There's a world of you and me,
And in this world there's happiness,
And merryment untold.

There's a house and fancy car,
And we can touch the stars,
We can do quite anything,
Because it's you and I.

As my dreams weave themselves,
And everything unfolds,
The magic starts to set in me,
And take me from reality.

And very soon a patchwork quilt,
Of all my dreams is built,
I take it everywhere I go,
For what it says I like to know.

And as the magic around me wraps,
I am bound quite tight,
And I'm kept from the opportunity,
Which then presents itself to me.

And all the while the quilt exists,
It advises me,
Where to go, what not to do,
What to say and then to who.

For I've become a prisoner,
To my magic quilt,
Oh, curséd quilt just set me free,
And how much happier I'd be!

But the magic quilt just laughs at me,
For it's reached the biggest density,
"Don't you love me?" it taunts,
"Don't you want to be with me?"

For now there's only two ways,
That I can defeat my quilt...
One is to get over it,
The other is to tell her...

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  • 17 years ago

    by Krazy

    Wow. that was cute. i love the very last 2 lines. nice twist. very good job. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Hannah Emellia

    Interesting. It's amazing how you write something- read it- put feeling into it- and the poem becomes real.

    About this poem, I really like it, It has a lot of feeling in it. I like poems with feeling because I think it helps the reader to better understand the poem.

    I hope I'm not making myself sound like a idiot. I hate it when I do that.. =/

    Ahwell, I'm putting you on my favs because you're poems are wonderful and good enough to read over and over. =)

    5 all the way.

  • 18 years ago

    by RadianceInReverse

    I loved it..Daniel...Awesome so much emotion....Thanx for the comment and i changed it...cause your right it only sucks when u say it does!!!!! Thanx agian!!!!

    All My Love.....Joclyn

  • 18 years ago

    by Krete

    The mellismatic, dreamy estate, of this poem is really quite the delectible genre. I do like how you write, i've skimmed through a few of your pieces, and firstly I must say, welcome to my favorites list.

    As far as this particular piece is concerned ... it is a pure expression of the menace love is. The secret delight in the triumph of finding love. Or not. I hope you continue this story, whether onward - good or bad - I am certain it recquires a sequel. But I do like it alone, in its unqiue flavor.

    Very original!

    5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Daniel J

    I wanted the start of the poem to be abrupt, hence the starting with "And" - and it appears to have had the effect I desired.

    As to the rhyme scheme, I didn't want any definite rhyming scheme, so as to sew the confusion a little more. The rhyming increases the more it gets to the end of the poem, and that is my mistake, I believe.

    The constant use of And just seemed right for some reason. I have no particular reason for it.

    I thank you for your comments, and for your kind words. Keep them both coming, especially any criticisms.

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