This has a wonderful lyrical quality, and while you use very modern language and idiomatic phrases (dotted line, for example), there's an archaic rhythm that I enjoy. Enjoyed this greatly.

Haven't read one of your poems for ages and ages, and ive really missed reading them!! its good to see you're still as amazing as ever. keep it up hun xoxo

Hey i likey this poem it sounds like a song and stuff and im going to right a new poem(its really a song) so plz comment on it ok

TheRealMan

Wonderfuly done!!!

Beautiful!!! i love it!

alwayz,
*ophelia*

Exquisite poem, wonderfully done, a shpw of excellence!!!

Great rythm and rhyme in this poem! though the story itself told a great story, portrayed as a metaphor with the classic end ryhmes...

I like tha way u rhyme in this 1 5/5