When you wake up

by MJ.   Nov 30, 2005


I gave you my word
I gave you my heart
I gave you my world
But you tore it apart

You told me you love me
You said it was real
You blinded my heart
And manipulated the way that I feel

You made me happy
But it was only a cheat
With empty promises
You made my heart beat

Only for you
You became my all
But in the end
You became my downfall

Now my once so strong love
Turns into hate
Why are we now apart
When together was our fate

You once told me
That you'd always stay
Then why do I stand here alone
And you're on your way

Now I realize
That forever stops
When the dream ends
And you wake up

*pls comment or vote, id like to know what i could do better-ill return the favor! ty

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  • 18 years ago

    by BrokenMemoriex

    It's a great poem! I like it a lot.. hope that you'll make the last line rhyme, but it still sounds ok. =)

  • 18 years ago

    by *~Heart~Broken

    Your doning a great job. nothing to fix.

  • 18 years ago

    by Tammi

    You are doing a great job please dont stop i can feel what you are writing keep up the great work 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    Honestly, i dont think u need any improvement, all u need is to say what u feel and u did a great work here.

    keep it up and all the best forever.
    5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by TinyDancer46

    Fantastic poem!!! You're very talented, so keep up the great work