Wow Steve... The anguish, the pain, the torture! My heart was cracking more and more with every line! A great write, so much feeling, so much need, so much desire... You're a great man Steve, you are not alone as we are here with you :)

Take care friend, hold that head up high!

SiE

Bill, I wish I could take all your pain away..... you poured everything into this one and my heart breaks for you. All I can say is stay strong every minute, every hour, every day and know that you'll be in my thoughts and prayers, you know where I am if you need anything.

How embarassing - Accept my apologies Bill, had an incredibly busy day whilst writing that :/

I love your poem. 5/5 As all your poems this one was beautiful...with a touch of sadness but really beautiful. Great poem as always. Please, take care...many hugs my friend.

Bill....
Ohhh how my heart breaks for you...and I mean that...I pray you find that peace you so desperately need. I'm here if you ever need me...*Tears* this one touched me so...

Love Ann

Another poem awesomely written hunny

Great poem i loved it so much!!!!!!!!!!!

This is one of the best poems i have read on this site.... it contains sorrow, pain and depression. beautfiully written, and i hope you overcome the obstatciles which stand in you way and hold you back from a better life...

heres a crit

Smile in their faces and play their silly game
No one need know that my heart is torn asunder
None of this really matters to me anymore
Everyone thinks that I have it made
Not realizing that I spend my nights afraid

I have never known fear my entire life
No one has ever been able to make me blink
All of that changed with the breaking of my heart
The man in the mirror scares the hell out of me
He knows all my deeds and might just set my soul free

There has been a change in his eyes lately
Facing the weight of an empty bed and broken heart
Despair and loneliness are becoming his friends
They are slowly weaving their way deep into his brain
Upon his heart they have placed their dark stain

The call of the ocean is all that is keeping him at bay
The sound of the surf, the scent of the sea, and freedom
Wash the sins from your soul and bury your troubles in the sand
The man in the mirror has no control over you in the light
I can handle this cold, lonely bed one more night

The winds of change are blowing cold
I can feel it stirring in the air at night
The forecast calls for pain and a change
Blameless, shameless and losing control
I will win this battle for what is left of my soul

Standing strong is all I have to do
One minute, one hour, one day at a time
I made myself a world that worked so damn well
Until my heart was torn beating from my chest
Now all I can wait for is peace and rest

10/10