Comments : Shooting Stars and Fireflies

  • 17 years ago

    by Laura

    WOW. Truly amazing. I also write in this style so Ihave much appreciation for this poem. Flow is flawless and the imagery is intense...

    Crickets are chirping in the fields nearby.
    Out from the grass a single firefly.
    A heart is formed from the light left behind.
    When visions of the future flood my mind.

    Was a poewrful stanza for me!!!!!!
    5/5 for sure.

    I wish I could write this well.

  • 17 years ago

    by Meggie33

    AMAZING! i could see the entire thing happening right in front of me! I definetly thought that was one of the best poems I have ever read! definetly a 5

    **meggie**

  • 17 years ago

    by Natalie

    Aww! This one was cute aswell. ^_^ I wish I was in love lol it sounds really fun. Anywho, Really good poem, I loved it tehe 5/5

    .x.TaLeEe.x.

  • 17 years ago

    by Jessica

    Awwwwwww..that was so adorable! it was just so sweet, i love this whole poem! it had great imagery, the descriptions were good, and it flowed and rhymed pretty well.. i love the 5th stanza best, it is so romantic and just beautiful and good job choosing the title, it really draws readers in.. the only problems that i could see were::

    I'm making wishes that I want come true.
    ^ i think there should be a "to" after "want"

    and

    The grass we lay turns silver by the moon.
    ^i think you should also add a "on" after "silver", but it maybe does have more effect this way..

    excellent write! really enjoyed it! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Jessica

    Lol, i mean a "on" before "turns".. :P

  • 17 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Haha, a true friend and you're kissing? That I can't see, but whatever fits your poem.

    It was still Beautifully written, like all your poems, and you have such a wonder way of telling a story with such flowing words. A great job.

    xDarkSuicidex 5.5

  • 17 years ago

    by 111308

    Awwwww This Is Adorably Cute!!!! Again YourAn Amazing Love Poet!! I Love Your Stuff...5/5 Loved It :D
    Love,
    Steph

  • 17 years ago

    by Sarah Dowlly

    Such a beautiful poem, I'm very impressed, well done & keep up the good work! 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by ! CLAIREEE.

    AWWWWWWWWW. this is beautiful! i love it. arrgh! you dont understand how much i love this poem. lol. its very goodo!!:D keep up the good work. i love all your poems. they make me smile. xD

    Love Claire. x o x o

  • 17 years ago

    by Taylor Lyn

    Another excellent poem, I love it. 5/5 from me! :) Great imagery!

  • 17 years ago

    by ShootingStar179

    That was very cute. Nice flow and a wonderful story.

  • 15 years ago

    by Mister 47

    Looking into her eyes I see them shine.
    My heart left thinking soon she will be mine.
    wonderfully said ,
    i enjoy it much