This was great....a little long for my taste but thats just me dont worry about that....i senced a little bit of forced rhyming....not too much though you did a very good job w/ imagery!! 5/5

The imagery was very well done. The flow was kinda hard but other than that it was amazing and Im glad i read this poems of yours.Keep up the amazing work.
Juls

Nicely done... i really liked how you wrote this... the only thing i have bad to say about this poem is that some of the ryhming seemed a little forced... but other that that it was fantastic...! keep it up

sammie

Brillian peice. seemed to have a rhythm to it thoughout. the rhyming did seem a little forced in some places, but not in any major way.

5/5

Quite a long poem, but it is good, it has some great rythm throughout it, umm, not really much to say except you are a great poet, keep up the great work, look forward to reading some more.
love Tara xxx

Wow!!! amazing!! if i got this right, rurouni kenshin?

great word choice... this onegot me good:

Kiss me Master,
Give my strength
When strong again
I shall avenge this weakness

For all my crimes I shall atone
Just one more night to taste your blood
I bury this need once and for all
I bury you within it

Cut me, make me see
Tear me to pieces
Lords of men forbid this night
Let me lick your blood,
Let me touch your crimes
All along the way,
don’t forget
my blazing eyes

amazing job,

5/5

Great lines! are you a fanatics of anime SaMURAI X?i am also one.
this poem is not only discussing about that anime movie. it really calls my blood unto some actions.yeah really.
" don’t forget
my blazing eyes ."

I like this poem. I'm just sure why I can't seem to put my fingure on it. The flow was great and so was the format that you used. The rhyming was also good. another 5/5 good job keep up the good work.