This is a very deep, and depression story, i hope like hell this isn't real. neways, one think that could help you, is to start a new line at punctuation, it will help with the flow trust me :) it was a great read. and i liked it. 5/5

Reading the title i thought it would just be another cutting poem but i was deadly wrong. The rhyme sheme may not be my favourite buts that just person prefrance. a good poem makes you stop and think and read again. It took a couple times reading this to get the details to this poem. Making a poem where every message is not always overt is wonderful. Great job!

Holy SH!+ nice poem.. Very beautifull but it took me a few times to get some of the things right that I red. Nonetheless it was a pretty well written out poem....

I loved this.
This poem is really deep and you can describe the suffering and pain really well.

A very sad ans deep poem with emotion expressed throughout. Was a really good poem.
love Tara xxxx

I REALLY liked this poem... at the beggining i couldnt quite figure out what it was about, but you used good forshadowing and great metaphors, and brought it all togeather in the end. i loved it and it was well written.. a few spelling mistakes and grammar, but otherwise it was perfect. i really hope one day youll be able to deal with life without this on your shoulder. The past of cource, is never forgotten, but we sometimes need to remember it, so we learn from it, and arent condemned to repeat it . Youve gone through a Tramatic situation, and really hope it doesnt effect you for the rest of your life. it wasnt your fault. just remember. if u ever need to talk , im here.

Oh, wow! is this true, god i hope not! if it is i am SO sorry. stay strong hun, excellent poem.

Expresion=awesome depth A+
keep up the great work
~Courtney~

Wow... that was an amazing poem. congratulations!!! i loved it 5/5

Ruby

Thats so horribly sad.... so the father was taking drugs and killed his wife? thats so sad! great poem, though. 5/5

Wow your poem is so great! It has so much emotion and depth! It flowed well together as well. Your a really good writer. I read it a couple of times and finally got the message it was giving, i loved it to pieces! Keep up the awesome work! Take Care! =D
~Luvz~
~Chica~
xoxo

I am honestly intrigued by this profoundly dark and well written poem

Hey can you comment on my last peom cause i think its really good and it got rated a one...and i know its not a one...so yeah plez *begs noni* giggle giggle..talk to you laterz
yeah i already gave you a 5/5

That was beautiful. I liked it alot. Keep up the good work because you have a lot of talent. *5/5*