I think this poem is brilliant, just a little difficult to read. In my personal opinion, I think that long poems are made easier to read by splitting into stanzas, but I know many people will disagree.
Also, the first two lines
'Speak not to me of hope and light,
For both these are gone,'
I think would sound slightly better as
'Speak not to me of hope and light,
For both of these are gone,'

I know this is a small thing, but I think it makes it flow better :) Great ideas though :)

Wow...this is so amazing..loved every bit of it.
great work indeed.
all the best and take care

stay strong

Hey orion,
great job. like, just, wow! it rocked! keep it up, man!
hannah

... great poem

Hi Orion

awesome job! i just loved it.
u write so well
keep it dear

Bharti

O! that was so beautiful Orion. It sounds like it came from the very depths of your soul. i do hope you find the peace you are looking for in the wonderful words you write.

we are all with you my friend!

good luck
shobhana

Dude your flow is awsome you made me read a five minute poem without losing interest and like the flow wasnt rough at all it had very good structure weather u know it or not 5/5

It brought me to tears.
cuz you know,
seeing sad people always makes me feel bad
please don't be so sad.

I liked the way you wrote this but please be a little happier.
have a great day,
marjan

Very nice poem .. love it :) keep up the good work..

Hey thanks 4 commentin on mi poem :) My name Jessica ( as you already no ) noice poems i liked them :) most ov mi poems come from when im inspired, i just cant pick up a pen and write one i need reason to... you can say im a lazy writer but i write my poems ov truth

That was so beautiful, and so deep, they imagery was amazing too, f**k stanzas, some poems just don't need them. That was absolutely stunning. And thanks for the comment on my poem by the way. 5/5 and deserves better!
luv Helen xxx

Fantastic poem. Real quality.

On a more personal note: thank you so much for commenting on my poems, you have no idea how much this means to me

Good poem 5/5 n thanks 4 the coment xoxox CrAzY xoxox

Ya i agree... ppl shouldn't say things will get better, when they dont kno that for a fact... i mean.. i've did the same thing, but i guess ppl make mistakes. no one is perfect. if you need me to listen, i'm here...

hugs,
michelle

Can i just say this left me speechless/// 5/5
love
amy

How sad....i love it though. so amazing.

Awe. this is sad. excelllent writing.

Wow. amazing. you portrayed so much depth and emotion in your words .. im awe struck. it flowed so well, was deep, had a great meaning, and made me think of life through a different perspective than i usually would of. and your right, we shouldnt be so optomistic about life as we dont know of what the future will bring so who are we to say it will get better or not. i really enjoyed this. keep it up!

Amazing poem... :( love it alot... im not alway proud to be a cutter. im definately ashamed of my arms and legs.... always here, sam x

Awwwwww.........so sad . But its a great poem
5/5
keep it up

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