WoW! That was deep and definately dark, so you did put it in the right catogory, lol.

Allowing ourselves get lost in black outs
Do you hear shattered voices?

I liked how you repeated this phrase thoughout the poem, almost giving it a songlike quality. The only thing is I don't think I like the title in relation to the poem. It fits sort of to me, but not quite enough. It is a good title, just maybe not for this piece. Good poem Tony, hope I was helpful!

-Tainted Mikochan

Wow......... i am speechless.... i am definitely adding you to my favorites. keep up the phenomenal work!!
-xXx-

That was beautiful. continue to write

That was a very good poem. The only part that bothered me was the you said 'sole' in the first stanza. This confused me because I didn't know if you meant 'sole' as in the sole of a shoe or 'soul' as in the soul of a person. Other than that I really liked it. You are very talented. *5/5*

That poem was amazing. You did a great job. It's a very dark poem and it was written so well.

I loved this poem the word choice was perfect and it was so deep...5/5....Thanks for the comment...I always return the favor

WOW!!! very dark, but absolutely amazing!!! fantastic imagery; creates a verrrrry dark and creepy mood. very powerful, and very brilliant.

keep up the good work, you are definately talented.

xXx

Creative, great word choice. You can still improve your flow

Wow...this was...dark! lol...it gave me chills...it was so deep. great imagery too...great word choice...it probably contributed to how powerful the poem is...i loved it...great job.

That poem was good... just you have better poems... it is really good.... i love you writeing... you are so... talented...

Really dark. Some deep thoughts. A few spelling errors that didn't mess with the overall piece. Some cool imagery and some really great words. Something that was pretty good and well dark. Liked how just the words added to this.
~Faith-less