Knife in my Hand

-Everything I ever loved is gone,
it's hurting so much I can't hold on.-
i feel so much like this...
this poem is amazing. 5/5
lauren

I agree with silver that the topic is cliche *I just finished reading a couple of se;f-harm type poems* And if you want to do this kind of topic make it stand out so that we can't help but WANT to read it again. I've told this to a couple of people today: I want to feel some kind of emotion from the poem.

This poem is cliche, but I sort of guessed the subject by the title.
I think you have all the right tools, but you just aren't using them properly.
You can write well and with feeling, you can get your message across to the reader but you're writing about the wrong things. Try something new, that hasn't been done before and I'm sure it will be fantastic. It's just this has been done thousands of times before and that's the only thing which lets it down. Good effort, keep writing.

Wow this is awesome, reminds me of some of my writing

Dang Levi i never thought so much as u 4 a poet but this is 1 good poem i luv it newayz ttys bye

~*~Luv Kiah~*~