Comments : If...

  • 18 years ago

    by Monika

    Oh that sadddddd

  • 18 years ago

    by Vanessa Lea

    Great Poem - I can really relate to everything you are saying here. Some things are impossible to take away.

  • 18 years ago

    by Mitch

    Nicely done. Loved It.

  • 18 years ago

    by Kandi

    I love this poem...wow it's so good

  • 18 years ago

    by Lauren

    Wow this is amazing. and so true for me and many other people.
    thanks for commenting my work. yours is great.
    -lauren

  • 18 years ago

    by FoundHim

    Wow.......ive read this one an the one called its all bc of you an outta the two this is my fav..ive only read these two so far...but im definitely gonna read ur others.....this poem is really amazing...short but a great message was sent across i think...this is a true poem.....doing those things will never take it away....

  • 18 years ago

    by Danielle Gagnon

    AWSOME! your really talented. your poems are amazing.

  • 18 years ago

    by PS

    Niiice. i know some many people who need to read this type of thing .i love the style.

  • 18 years ago

    by Kaylee

    This makes me wonder whether the speak had caused the "You" in the last stanza pain or if the speaker was being burdend with the "You's" pain. I think you could have added a bit more detail but this one doesn't really seem to have needed it.

    Word choice was good. Organization was good. Overall, 4.8/5 but since I can't do that I'll round it up.

  • 18 years ago

    by Ashlick

    I LOVE ALL OF YOUR POEMS!!!!SOOO GOOD
    Ashlick(ashley)

  • 18 years ago

    by *~vixen~*

    This was a good short poem

  • 18 years ago

    by master of shadow

    This poem is pritty good. though would not say it is anywhere near the standard of some of you others. the form and idea were pritty good, the flow and structure also good. but it seems to lack depth and originality.

    still a good peice though

  • 18 years ago

    by master of shadow

    This poem is pritty good. though would not say it is anywhere near the standard of some of you others. the form and idea were pritty good, the flow and structure also good. but it seems to lack depth and originality.

    still a good peice though

  • 18 years ago

    by louise

    Oh my god this poem is amazing!! louise xx

  • 18 years ago

    by Emma

    I love the message of this poem...touching and great feeling.....Great write...
    Emma 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Natalie

    This was great! && So true. I loved it, Honestly.Keep up the great work =]

    luv natalie x-x

  • 18 years ago

    by azlan26

    This poem was really really sad, it's like the character is hurting themself wanting it to help...but it isn't
    All of the different cicumtances look on different sides of pain and I just thought it was so effective, like no matter of pain can make anything change and everything has been tried
    Just a little thing...all the "ill"s and "id"s would look muhc better as "I'll" and "I'd" and on the second line from the end "This" has a capital for no reason...I know I'm being boring here aren't I?
    No matter...still an excellent poem, one of the best I've read today
    5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Lying To Live

    Awesum stuff ...kinda similar to one of my poems good work

    *~CrImSon__TeArS~*

  • 18 years ago

    by LostHopesCrimsonTears

    Not bad, a few lines could be better, but good overall

  • 18 years ago

    by Natalie

    Wasn't too long, Wasn't too short. You did a really good job on this one. I liked how you explained each part. Really creative. Keep it up! 5/5

    `taleee xx