It's awesome! keep it up

Oh n not to mention I like the rhyming pattern

It was really excellent even though when I read that it was going to be like a suicide, I was taken aback. The rhyming was really good though, and great word chose. I would find some minor changes though like to should be too in one of your lines. Still 5/5 for such a chilling tale.

I thought the last stanza was very well done; it describes suicide in a more creative way than most suicide poems do. I hope it's not true for you, because this was a well done poem and it would be good to hear more from you in the future.
-DJ

Piercing poetry :) That was a really great write . . .and even better to read ;D Just one thing, I think that on the line:
All hope of recognition would be to late
to should be too.
Hope this helps ;)

5/5

Peace. [Sole]

This poem was good, it was very emotional and i enjoyed eading it very much, great job

I enjoyed the last stanza the most it just grabbed my attention!! this poem was excellent well done!!
Hayley-Ree xxx

Hmm for some reason I liked it. I hate to tolerate suicide poems because the subject is so overused it makes me sick, however, this was ok. The reason was partly down to your use of vocabulary. Most people who write about suicide use common cliche words and descriptions, but you didn't, you used original and vivid descriptions and good vocabulary. I think the first stanza was a bit off with the flow, but once the poem got going it picked up and became quite fluent. Keep writing.

A very creative poem, with a mature style, you've obviously been writing for a while and you have a natural talent! well done!! xx

Wow it was very sad but touching. i found i liked it better and better as it went on. well done xxALLYxx

The beautiful description contrasted with the haunting sadness.
Keep writing!!!

Really good use of imagery

Interesting punctuation usage... Quite a good write. I liked how it was actually presented as a "tale", as in a story.
*5/5*
-Kate

WOW.. This was so good.. and i agree with invisible 2 you.. it got better and better to me the more i read of it.. good way to keep a reader interested.. Great job 5/5

~!*FallenTears~!*
~!*Meaghen~!*

I reject suicide poems...but this was a great poem

wonderfully written
great flow
beautiful rythm

~GLASS~

Wow.. that was very good! so powerful and deep.. :) keep it up!
jessy

Reminded me of the poem you wrote, Angel of Darkness. Very nice writting.
I loved the eerie images you created.

You did a wonderfull job, i realy liked this poem... KEep righting...

Candi

Great piece i really enjoyed reading it!! You did a fantastic Job!!! 5/5!! This poem was flawless!!!! Never quit writing!!

Once again, with the visual effects, great! just great. i loved this poem also, nice descriptions, great wording. 5/5