Comments : Tale of a Forgotten Soul

  • 18 years ago

    by LuvMeAlwayz

    It's awesome! keep it up

  • 18 years ago

    by LuvMeAlwayz

    Oh n not to mention I like the rhyming pattern

  • 18 years ago

    by Kaylee

    It was really excellent even though when I read that it was going to be like a suicide, I was taken aback. The rhyming was really good though, and great word chose. I would find some minor changes though like to should be too in one of your lines. Still 5/5 for such a chilling tale.

  • 18 years ago

    by Minkus

    I thought the last stanza was very well done; it describes suicide in a more creative way than most suicide poems do. I hope it's not true for you, because this was a well done poem and it would be good to hear more from you in the future.
    -DJ

  • 18 years ago

    by Sole

    Piercing poetry :) That was a really great write . . .and even better to read ;D Just one thing, I think that on the line:
    All hope of recognition would be to late
    to should be too.
    Hope this helps ;)

    5/5

    Peace. [Sole]

  • 18 years ago

    by Daze

    This poem was good, it was very emotional and i enjoyed eading it very much, great job

  • 18 years ago

    by Hayley Marie

    I enjoyed the last stanza the most it just grabbed my attention!! this poem was excellent well done!!
    Hayley-Ree xxx

  • 18 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    Hmm for some reason I liked it. I hate to tolerate suicide poems because the subject is so overused it makes me sick, however, this was ok. The reason was partly down to your use of vocabulary. Most people who write about suicide use common cliche words and descriptions, but you didn't, you used original and vivid descriptions and good vocabulary. I think the first stanza was a bit off with the flow, but once the poem got going it picked up and became quite fluent. Keep writing.

  • 18 years ago

    by Biscuit

    A very creative poem, with a mature style, you've obviously been writing for a while and you have a natural talent! well done!! xx

  • 18 years ago

    by holly

    Wow it was very sad but touching. i found i liked it better and better as it went on. well done xxALLYxx

  • 18 years ago

    by azlan26

    The beautiful description contrasted with the haunting sadness.
    Keep writing!!!

  • 18 years ago

    by *~vixen~*

    Really good use of imagery

  • 18 years ago

    by AllHailTheHeartbreaker

    Interesting punctuation usage... Quite a good write. I liked how it was actually presented as a "tale", as in a story.
    *5/5*
    -Kate

  • 18 years ago

    by Fallen~Tears

    WOW.. This was so good.. and i agree with invisible 2 you.. it got better and better to me the more i read of it.. good way to keep a reader interested.. Great job 5/5

    ~!*FallenTears~!*
    ~!*Meaghen~!*

  • 18 years ago

    by glass*wall*prison

    I reject suicide poems...but this was a great poem

    wonderfully written
    great flow
    beautiful rythm

    ~GLASS~

  • 18 years ago

    by Jessica

    Wow.. that was very good! so powerful and deep.. :) keep it up!
    jessy

  • 18 years ago

    by Darien

    Reminded me of the poem you wrote, Angel of Darkness. Very nice writting.
    I loved the eerie images you created.

  • 18 years ago

    by candi

    You did a wonderfull job, i realy liked this poem... KEep righting...

    Candi

  • Great piece i really enjoyed reading it!! You did a fantastic Job!!! 5/5!! This poem was flawless!!!! Never quit writing!!

  • 18 years ago

    by Ashley Van Eperen

    Once again, with the visual effects, great! just great. i loved this poem also, nice descriptions, great wording. 5/5