Define A Universal Man

by Theo   Mar 15, 2006


Define a universal man
Invent a fluid plea
Create a vivid village
Across this galaxy
See the blazing stars drop off
Exclaim in exalting light
Be free to grasp and jump for air
Increase in spontaneous flight
Indeed I do this on spare time
Cuts gently by a blade
Tears open just to leak the faith
They say heaven is man-made
Man-made is just a relative term
A term which has a bend
This light hits water in many ways
My God I must defend
Please trick me in obnoxious ways
O spirit I do not see
I take my mind and now evolve
Above the signs of symmetry

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  • 18 years ago

    by holly

    That was really great it flowed perfectly and the rhyme was very effective well done xx ALLY xx

  • 18 years ago

    by David Marshall

    Omg that was awsome...i loved the way u made that flow...and great use of words.some parts were hard to understand..but thats only cause im not that edgucated...keep it up
    take care,
    david

  • 18 years ago

    by None

    I think that you wrecked this poem by using all of the big words. I know by saying that it makes me sound a bit lame grammar wise, but it looks like you flipped through the dictionary looking for more enticing words.

    In diong so, I read this poem and instantly thought that you were trying to please the reader in using intelligent words, but it seriously looks like you have no idea what the words mean and just spotted them out in a dictionary or thesaurus.

  • 18 years ago

    by StefQ

    I agree wit kaylee, the words could be organised better but overall very good poem
    it made me think lol
    anyways a deserved 5/5

    ~StefQ

  • 18 years ago

    by Kaylee

    I'm going to go a different route than other people. I think you could have broken this up every four lines. I didn't really get it at first but maybe it's more of an open meaning one. The words were good but it could have been organized better. Keep writing, though.