Like a drug

I love this poem. Once again I ignored your internet slang (yes I am going to mentoin that /every/ time) and focused on the meaning, flow, ect. I'm taking you up on your offer of continued comment trading.

These two lines

now i wished id never used
never even start

The first one kinda puts a bump in the flow, and I have a suggestoin for re-wording. You could change it to 'never had a start' then the reader isn't stoping and thinking, started, then fixing it back in their mind again. It's still fine if you don't change it

I love the simplisity you feel while you read it, yet you know it really goes deeper. It keeps the reader reading on to figure out what you mean, what you'll tell them next. Very nicely done.

Almost every thing has a purfect rhym, great flow, and that almighty demanding multi laid false simplisity. And of coarse, it's subject is widley relatable, grabs a bit of smyithy from the reader, makes them feel as all good poetry should.

Love it, keep it up.

~Purple~

Amazing! this is such a great way to put .. everything! well done i love this!!

p.s. thanks 4 the apology, no offence taken, sorry it sounded that way.

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That was yet again another awesome poem i loved how you put it all together and comparing love to a drug that was new ive never heard that before any way you did a great job another 5/5

I love reading your writing your on my favorite list:)

I am continuously awed by your writing...it never gets old. i really like how you compare his love to a drug, and the way you wrote it, it all fits together perfectly. you just have to remember that one day in the future, it may be tomorrow or a year from now, youll find another...just never give up hope

Yeah i'm just using this to respond to ur comment. thanks. but u don't know what kinna position i'm in right now in my love life. that only tells part of it. i'm pretty f-ed up with relationships. they never work right. or they work too well for to many ppl if ya catch what i mean.....i have problems with them. it may be a good poem that may be true but that's only part of it. what i'm going through right now is pretty difficult and most wouldn't understand. hey do u have a messanger or myspace or anything i could add u on? just curious if u don't want ta tell me it's ok. i'm cool with that. c ya.