Comments : You're the one

  • 18 years ago

    by Linsey

    I love this.. I know for you feel.. I feel the same way for my boy.

  • 18 years ago

    by xXxDarkDreamerxXx

    This is a really great poem!!!! I loved it! Great job!

  • 17 years ago

    by Ike Dizzle

    Nice job it's sweet. 5/5
    -Vino

  • 17 years ago

    by PorcelainMoon

    This is a sexy sexy and i love you and ur poems ur in ma faves=p

    love Dean xoxoxo

  • 17 years ago

    by peculiargirl

    That's pretty!

  • 17 years ago

    by azlan26

    Very simplistic, which isn't a bad thing, gets the point across well - you obviously love him loads!
    You could try some imagery in a poem like this, I know it was a quick one but you could make it even deeper :)
    Still a good job though - keep writing =]

  • 17 years ago

    by Ike Dizzle

    It was pretty good for a quick poem. I liked it. 5/5
    -Vino

  • 17 years ago

    by Catastrophic Beauty

    Very sweet...good job

  • 17 years ago

    by The Names Craig!

    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by dee

    Hey this is really cute. better then you think.. keep it up
    dee

  • 17 years ago

    by sezz

    Another good one peanut

  • 17 years ago

    by PorcelainMoon

    Ohh I see here's the love. ;]

  • 16 years ago

    by Tainted Beauty

    Oh dear me. This poem was not very strong in my opinion, it had a rather weak structure (missing puntuation, etc.) and the rhyming was very common and not very creative. You had plenty of emotion though, which is good. I must say, the thing that bothers me the most in writing is bad grammar. You REPEATEDLY made the mistake between "your" and "you're".

  • 16 years ago

    by Curry

    Actually,this is one of my favorites.
    but one thing...in the 4th section it says "
    i dont know what I'll do" well i think it would sound better "I dont know what I'd do" but thats just my opinion. other than that,wonderful poem!

  • 16 years ago

    by Another Lost Hero

    I like it. my style is pretty similar to yours. keep it up

  • 15 years ago

    by Biya

    WOW , so lovely poem
    Biya

  • 15 years ago

    by IL0veJarrad

    I like it.. it is very sweet