Dream?

It's different, but defantly very good. your word choice is perfect, really adding to the peice and the content is brilliantly expressed.

Really like it.. Such short words but the effect you leave on readers is really chilling.
There's just one critique..when before a vowel, 'a' isn't used, instead 'an'.
So with 'a illusion' it just rings wrong.
Take care sweetie...great poem
>torn -x.x.x-

A love how you wrote it. Like A illiusion.....
A illusion...
etc.

A great poem, it really made me think, which takes a lot - lol!

Oh i like this, thats a very erm i supose trying point it ends on..i still cant get my head around it, but it is very good.

Very nice work!!

Jon