Very profound....made me think...apart from a few funny characters...nothing short of your great poetry....

[lostlaureate- come find me]

Wow wonderful poem, great use of vocab as well. The only mistake I found is in the fifth stanza the first word, you might wanna fix the spelling mistake.

Other then that this poem is fantastic! I especially like the lines:

"Memories of pain,
of sorrow and regret;
memories I would rather forget.
A wasted life with nothing achieved;
missed opportunities and failure."

Very powerful. Keep up the awesome work! 5/5
~Luvz~
~Angie~
xoxo

Brilliant peice, had a lot of meaning to it which was very well portrayed.

5/5

.....Its a face with a smile, a face full of wisdom.....

beautiful penned.

Awesome! I really liked it, perfect imagery, perfect flow and the scattered rhymes worked well with the rest of the poem. Nice.

Peace. [Sole]

Hey this is certaily a very unique poem, loved it all the way.

all the best and take care

(plz let me know when the results are out..thnx a ton)

Very good peice well written with a good use of vocad thoughout

5/5

Wow, i have to say this is one of the original poems i have ever read i don't think anyone in here has wrote something like that, well at least i don't think you did an amazing job. keep it up. keep on writing. love always and forever.

Yes this is splendid, although it lacks a regular rhyme that i would normaly look for, i find that the content in this case is far superior, and so it is equally as good as any other with a rhyming pattern.

A wonderful poem indeed,

Jon

What to say..... Very good job. Alot of people should really take notice to this one. 5/5

Great poem, really made me think.. You have a wonderful way with words..
5/5

Amazing poem. 5/5
really nice rhymes and it is just so nice to read.
great work

That's a cool piece. Words were great as was the imagery. An astonishing piece that poses interesting and profounding thoughts when read.
~Faith

I like it..made me think

Wow, very original and creative. I thought this poem was wonderfully penned. Not in a million years would I be able to write something as astonishing as this piece. It made me think. Keep it up! 5/5

Creative, imaginative too. well done
x

Wonderful words and abeautiful vivid image. Your title was catching and felt like it really did belong in this section. It also felt deep for two words.

I think your strongest stanza was this one:
Its a face full of wisdom,
a face with a smile;
a frown only every once a while.
A full life, brimming with happiness;
rewarding experiences and success.

Even though the while threw me off.

I think our weakest one though was this one:
Waking from a slumber,
I look through a glass,
with a yawn and a sniff
I gaze at a familiar face.

It just didn't feel right with the others. It's really good just not as powerful.

"a frown only every once a while."

- I don't think that sounds quite right... maybe "once IN a while" ??

This poem is very original and different. The only part I don't get is who you see when you look through the window... because you don't say it's a reflection of you... Anyway, you did well. 4/5. Keep up the good work!

~BJ~

Memories of pain,
of sorrow and regret;
memories I would rather forget.

I would change this to

Memories of pain,
Sorrows and regret.
Some of which I would rather forget.

Removes word repetition and also remids us that things we regret we should remember and learn from.

Not over-elaborate or too prosey. A good message of self awareness without saying too much.

Nice effort.

Bret

Wonderful poem hun, I thought it was very original =] Keep up the good work 5/5