Comments : My Paper Heart

  • 14 years ago

    by The Flame Within

    Wow that was awsome
    i love the ending
    it was put together so good
    gaw you are such a good writer
    wish we could talk more
    hope your doing ok
    Love you lots

  • 14 years ago

    by Kaylee

    It wasn't good it was pretty great and it you read some of my comments I can be a tough judge on poems. The structure was good, organized and rhyming did not seem forced. The idea of a paper heart was a different take on a broken heart so I loved that approach. haunting and sad but also beautiful as in the desire to find love. I think that's what it meant.

  • 14 years ago

    by *Nouman*

    O this poem is just awesome! i hav nothing to say just that im lovin' it!
    keep up the good work
    luv ya

  • 14 years ago

    by Marissa

    I LOVE YOUR POEM!!!!!
    it is so good!!
    i absoloutly love it!!
    keep up the great work!!!

  • 14 years ago

    by Allison

    That was an awsome poem. I really liked it and the whole idea of it. Keep up the good work because you are really talented.

  • 14 years ago

    by PS

    I dont really like these type of poems and this is no exception. but i do love these lines
    "For the love of my life would never
    Leave my paper heart to break"
    and
    "It was my mistake to draw that heart
    A perfect picture of my own
    But it was your mistake to break it
    And turn my heart to stone."

    they are amazing. it sounds so good and i love them

  • 14 years ago

    by glass*wall*prison

    WOW great write...the ryming was great but the flow was a little off not enough to take away a perfect score though

    5/5

    ~GLASS~

  • 14 years ago

    by Fallen~Tears

    WOW ... i LOVED it excellent write .. it was amazing.. I know exactlly how this feels since this is what ive been trying to say all along.. 5/5

    ~!*FallenTears~!*
    ~!*Meaghen~!*

  • 14 years ago

    by none

    In al holy wowness!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! miss sierra kisck ass!!!!!!!!!!!!! thats just amazing....beautiful in every way. its so sad....but amazing. i love you more then life itself!!!!!!!!"a childs life is like a piece of paper on which every person leaves a mark" and you sierra have left a very big one on mine....luv ya babe...hang in there keep writing!!!!!
    ~chelsea~

  • 14 years ago

    by none

    I LOOOOOOOOOOOOOOVE uuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu siiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiii!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :D

  • 14 years ago

    by Elynnka

    Love it!
    Tip: You should try using "Here's a heart you cannot break" insted of "can't", I think it flows better :)
    Great work, keep up the amazing writing .::heart::.

  • 14 years ago

    by Georgi

    WOW, sierra, this is stunning. Im speechless! really, wow, jesus! Incredible incredible writing.
    really really good i love it, so sad =(
    Its really original, i love it huni =)
    but i love u more

    xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

  • 14 years ago

    by gasping for air

    Wow girlie!!!! this is some powerful crap!! i worry about you!!! god damn... i look around myself, here and on aim and all i see are girls that are depressed and suicidal or whatever... ITS HORRIBLE!!! makes me want to cry.. life is so unfair to the best ppl.. wish that i could fix something for you!!
    lots of love
    amanda and baby

  • 14 years ago

    by broken angel

    ......Haunting, literally stole my breath away. don't let people critique you on your "organization"! This poem was absolutely flawless, and I believe you know that. You deserve a 5/5 from every person that reads this! Excellent, excellent job. ~luv always, KT

  • 14 years ago

    by pain is me

    This is a great poem
    im so speechless
    the ending was unexpected
    but in a good way
    you seem to have so many emotions flowing in you at one time
    its wonderful
    keep up the good wokd
    xxxx

  • 14 years ago

    by SmileeItsBritt

    Im speechless.

  • Wow...I dont know what to say..Your poem was so emotional, I could feel the pain as I was reading. I loved the ending..it was all amazing though..Good work 5/5
    -Shannon

  • 14 years ago

    by Steph

    Hey i really like ur poem it had a really good ending and was very emotional i almost cried! Keep up the good work

    love steph xoxox

  • 14 years ago

    by MissAlotta

    Wow...I'm just astonished. ...the emotion you used just so heartbreaking to anyone who reads it. outstanding job 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by dijah

    This is the most creative poem i ever saw keep up the good work.