It wasn't good it was pretty great and it you read some of my comments I can be a tough judge on poems. The structure was good, organized and rhyming did not seem forced. The idea of a paper heart was a different take on a broken heart so I loved that approach. haunting and sad but also beautiful as in the desire to find love. I think that's what it meant.
I dont really like these type of poems and this is no exception. but i do love these lines
"For the love of my life would never
Leave my paper heart to break"
"It was my mistake to draw that heart
A perfect picture of my own
But it was your mistake to break it
And turn my heart to stone."
they are amazing. it sounds so good and i love them
In al holy wowness!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! miss sierra kisck ass!!!!!!!!!!!!! thats just amazing....beautiful in every way. its so sad....but amazing. i love you more then life itself!!!!!!!!"a childs life is like a piece of paper on which every person leaves a mark" and you sierra have left a very big one on mine....luv ya babe...hang in there keep writing!!!!!
Wow girlie!!!! this is some powerful crap!! i worry about you!!! god damn... i look around myself, here and on aim and all i see are girls that are depressed and suicidal or whatever... ITS HORRIBLE!!! makes me want to cry.. life is so unfair to the best ppl.. wish that i could fix something for you!!
lots of love
amanda and baby
......Haunting, literally stole my breath away. don't let people critique you on your "organization"! This poem was absolutely flawless, and I believe you know that. You deserve a 5/5 from every person that reads this! Excellent, excellent job. ~luv always, KT