Hey well I'll take a crack at a half-decent comment
It struck me that the 1st two lines of the 3rd staza kinda throw the flow a bit . . you could change the second line to
"In turn you have closed mine"

And the 1st line of the second stanza would sound better as,
"This is not my perfect world"
Isn't is a bit colloquial, and again, scr.ews the flow a bit
The second line of the 1st stanza may sound better if it started with and
There now Louisa can comment properly

It was overall a really good poem, keep it up
xxxxxx

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Awesome writing...never stop...

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I liked this poem, the plot of the poem was very heartfelt and sincere... The wording was a bit funny in a few places due to a little bit of forced rhyming but other than that it was sweet and simple, sad and meaningful, a poem that'll be hard to forget!

I thought this poem was very well written!! I loved it!! Keep up the good work!! 5/5 on my list!!

This poem could make a wonderful song, and I like the format you used. 5/5! Good job :)

The poem was snappy and quick, like it rolled off the end of someones tongue. I kinda liked it.

Brilliant, I really liked this poem def 5/5 take care sarah x

Once again an amazing write. all your pieces seem to have a really good structure to them. a really inner plot that i find interesting.

'Two strangers in a foreign land'

for some odd reason, i really am intrigued by that line. its a really good use of words

Kat

I'm liking all of your poems so far..don't be afraid to write more..haha

Oooo how sweet...i like it a lot...well i like all your poems...lol..well done!