This is a grower!! I think that the repetition of "all" was used so effectively and the pronoun "you" made me hairs stand on end....this was so direct I felt as if you were talking to me....strong message and wonderfully put across....

[lostlaureate - come find me]

It felt more like accusing then trying to get the reader involved in the story. The words were effective....maybe too effective. It definenatly could be really good if you maybe worked on it more by making it longer.

Hmm im not sure that uncouth rhymes with youth. but whatever. besides that i really liked it because i felt that way for a extremely long time and still have fragments of that outlook toward a lot of people. so i like it.

Awesome 5/5

-Janean

The only thing I didnt like about this one was the word Uncouth at the end. It was all very beautiful, but I myself am not familliar with that word. MAYBE dumbing that down a little or choosing a new line for that last one could make this one all the better.

I loved it .. its so true!! i think maybe if it was a little longer it would make it better.. anyways I loved the idea and i loved the poem 5/5

~!*FallenTears~!*
~!*Meaghen~!*

Great job! it really expresses your feelings well. 5/5*

The last libe did not seem to have the same power and momentum as the rest f the poem which took away some of it's overall strengh. but overall this peice is very good, well constructed and written witha lot of power.

5/5

Great poem, powerful message to send out and so very true, I loved how you repeated "all", made the poem more intense...I would have loved to read more, it was kinda short, but amazing though =0)

Much Love Sabrina

I disagree with the rest; it wasn't short it was long enough lol also very well written, liked the repeating "all" altough the poem has a good message the last line doesn't seem so powerfull as the rest though
but still an amazing poem --> 5/5

~StefQ

The repeating all, perfection. I really enjoyed reading your poem - it was so direct, and I think I understood it, but maybe I translated it to my own imagination . . .who knows :)

Peace. [Sole]

Awesome poem i totally agree w/o a doubt! ^_^

All your stories the same.
[[I think you should maybe say "All your stories are the same"]]

I wasn't quite sure what this poem was meant to mean, but I did like the ending stanza alot. Keep it up.

Natalie``