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by Momentary Relapse   Apr 7, 2006


Tears fell onto the velvet lining
A silken voice floats up in harmony
To the silence unopposed
Broken fragments of thoughts die
Fading when memories burn
The incense sinks onto the ground
Blackness chokes what was sought
Breathing to taste a single cry
A voice murmurs into dimness
Moving the shroud to drape a moan
Time eternal fails to convince
Tears continue to fall
The candelabrum holds no light
Only perpetual darkness lives

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  • 16 years ago

    by Elapsed

    Very nice write.. the structure and flow was good. The use of grammar would make this poem even better imo.. just my 2cents worth.. great job.. keep them coming

  • 16 years ago

    by paul alexander

    Love it keep it up

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    Great poem, it is short but still very powerful, I enjoyed reading it.You created effective and really incredible rhythm with just few words, I like the wording too and you expressed emotions excellently! Well done!

  • 16 years ago

    by jackie

    Wow i really liked it 5/5
    nice work

  • 16 years ago

    by Michelle18

    This is a good poem...the flow was good..

    although i think it would read better if you changed the word "fell" to fall ..in the first line.... because its past tense and the rest of the poem is present tense.

    but overall this is pretty good.