The cruelty of a tortured soul

by SomewhereAmongThePieces   Apr 8, 2006


Why do I crave your constant pain?
How is your torture my pure joy?
Am I sick? Have I gone so insane?
Do you feel like some kind of toy?

I want you to know how it feels!
You never made me feel human
I’m not your lifelike doll, I’m real
I’m walking away from you, fuming

You stepped all over me crushing me
You destroyed my image, my pride
I’ll pull myself back together you see
Giving you pay back on the side

You’re a liar, a fake, a total mess
You will never make more friends
You can never get a guy unless
You work corners & even that depends

Ugly slots like you can’t make friends
You were lucky the day I came along
But you ruined everything this is the end
You’re dead to me now goodbye and so long

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  • 17 years ago

    by Stuart

    Goodjob with the poem

  • 18 years ago

    by Smilesunshine

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  • 18 years ago

    by Princess Love

    Oh wow, what a poem! Very strongly written. Great job!

  • 18 years ago

    by Daniel J

    Well, I must say, I recognise the sentiment. Whilst the poem itself rhymes and flows (moreso than my own, by all accounts, it appears) I would point out two things:

    1) The repetition of "you can't make friends" in the second last stanza, line 2, and the last stanza, line 1.

    The next is, of course, even more of a mere suggestion than the above:

    2) Perhaps you could tell people what went wrong, and use this as the main focus of the poem instead of the sheer hate.

    Of course, that's what I'd do, and that's why we're two different people with two different styles.
    But keep in mind, this style of "I hate you" is very common here.

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