This was a good poem i liek the way you used the weather almost as a symbol, it was a nice touch. the story in this poem pushed through and the form was good. Im not a huge fan of having no rhyme scheme but in this instance it worked out well just the same :)
~jacob

Wow nice job! i love the imagery. i can see it happening. and i love how the storm is a detached sort of element that just touches on the scene and turmoil. nice job!

Could anybody feel that storm of emotion? I could just by the words you chose. It painted a picture of a storm but gave the feeling of watching a fight from the point of view of someone so innocent in it. I liked the way the emotions came out froma few simple lines.

Wow, beautiful job. It has such strong emotion. What an amazing job on this poem. I can really relate to it.

This is great, Darien! I love the fact that you ended it with hope.. Nicely chosen words and a wonderful flow... Great job!

Awesome! The ending is great, leaving the reader with hope. Well chosen words, nice flow...Great job!

Daniel an0ther t0uching piece. l0t 0f em0ti0n in this. very well written.. h0pe ur 0hk

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d0ra

Aw. This was really good. Loved it how you compared it to the storm and sun, and when then sun came, your parents came and aplogised. A really good poem, with alot of emotion. Loved it. 5/5 keep it up!

`taleee xx