Comments : The Forgotten Witness

  • 17 years ago

    by Natalie

    Wow, Kaylee! That was really good. Everytime I read your poetry, They get better and better each time. I have high hopes that you will become a writer one day. And if you do. I hope you know I'll be first in line to by your book =] But back to this poem, I thought everything about it was wonderfull, It was just perfect. Not a thing I would Change. 5/5

    luv natalie x-x

    P.s When you get a new poem, Just tell me. And I will comment on it since you only wanted one this time. x-x

  • 17 years ago

    by master of shadow

    Fantastic peice good flow and brilliant content, the use of imegry and descriptions though.

    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by Cuddles

    Kaylee, your poetry astounds me. The emotions a person feels and the things that go through one's mind when they read this are unexplainably
    amazing. You've created a masterpiece.

  • 17 years ago

    by shannon

    Wow.. i really really love this poem.. i gave you a 5/5. very powerful

    thanks for sharing
    shannon

  • 17 years ago

    by Momentary Relapse

    It was good. An undertone kept the flow smooth and the words fit with this piece. The imagery was great and well it was overall good.
    ~Faith

  • 17 years ago

    by Bridgette

    This poem was so sad! But you wrote it very beautiful, its very descriptive. Great job! 5/5* keep up the good work!

  • 17 years ago

    by Sole

    Erm. I am actually stumped for words. What is there to say - that poem was . . . perfect! I'm going to go and sulk now . . . how could anyone comptete with that??

    Peace. [Sole]

  • 17 years ago

    by PS

    Amazing.

    Reading newspaper stories
    never pour dread into my
    body as they used to.
    I’ve been toppled over
    with emotions, fear spilling
    from life’s champagne glass.

    i love that line. the imagery you use is fantatic. um the flow is great. great job!

  • 17 years ago

    by LuvMeAlwayz

    Awesome!

  • 17 years ago

    by Allison

    I liked it and it was wrote in a different style then I usually read. I think that it had a really cool style to it. You are really talented. Keep up the good work and always do your best. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by jello

    This is awsome! cool style...5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by wdnest

    This is an excellent poem thought it was wonderful and full of emotion

  • 17 years ago

    by Once an Angel

    That was a sad poem yes, but sad tails of just as much right to be told as the happy ones do. However sad poems don't have the happily ever after that the human soul craves keeping so many people away from there. Here's the thing though, in the sad tails we can find comfort and understand with a complete stranger who has shared a burden similar to our own, who as also had cause to grieve and morn life. That is what this poem as done for me. A brilliant write, as so many of yours are.

    -Tainted Mikochan

  • 17 years ago

    by ~Amanda~

    A very good poem, with such emotion and pain. the reader could feel the pain by reading it and thats wut makes it a good poem

  • 17 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Awesome! I like your work alot, you are so talented, keep it up
    xxxx

  • 17 years ago

    by Jolene

    I really like your writing
    Good Luck in Life

  • 17 years ago

    by S R P

    Wow
    you have a good talent, i loved it.

  • 17 years ago

    by nerissa

    That was awsome i realy felt it when i waas readin

  • 17 years ago

    by melissa

    Sexy peom

  • 17 years ago

    by N J Thornton

    Some great images and descriptions in this.
    I feel this is similar format to the other poem of yours that I have just read. I like that format, the single line at the end works well.
    I felt quite a bit of emotion too when reading. I could feel the desperate aching, longing and sadness.

    Well written, keep it up.