Hmm wow I'm impressed.

I loved this poem. Beautifully writen, wonderfull flow, and fantastic use of words. Loved it! It's excellent =)

Very well done =)!

Lotsaaaaaaa love
-xxx-

Wow that is amazing.

I really love that, it's got an edge about it.

"Countless struggles I've made in vain,
To weaken the devil's attack,
But every time murder it's evil,
The pain is inflicted to me, back. "

I especially like this part

ness xxx

Beautiful!! very powerful and raw. love it! stay strong and take care,
-xXx-

I really like this one. I love that last line; "Is this forever, This anger, pain and fright?" I ask myself that nearly 50 times a day. Is it ever gonna stop? But yeah, I really did like this, I do think you could go deeper, Like for example, Explain maybe how much its hurting that no one understands, or how scared you are that this could last forever. Just an idea. But I still liked it alot!! 5/5

`natalie x-x

"The despair, distress, anger and grief,
The emptiness and loneliness inside,
The pitiful feeling as I think to myself,
Is this forever? This anger, pain and fright?"

My favorite part ^^
It is a AWESOME poem!!!
But your poem is like one of those books where it leaves you and you want to know what happens but you never find out

Great job i liked it great description and feeling good job

Great job i liked it great description and feeling good job

Wow...i'm speechless! wonderful job.

Wow when i saw the name i thought it would be a bit more destructioness but it is an amazin words n an amazing poem written by an amazin poet it has alot of feeling and sence of such honestly.

xox
love stained sheetz

Amzing. The flow, rythym and it was unique. I like it. The detail and imagery was great.

Good poem!! And wow, you're only 12???
Thats actually very good for a 12 year old!!!
I espesially loved these lines:
"The land called love still clearly visible,
But through the walls to which I'm tied."
They just stuck to me.Good Job~!!

Ok wow...you're 12?? That's amazing! I don't ever remember my language being that advanced and intense! You've blown me away already. Great work, it flowed quite well! 5/5
keep on penning,
Dana

Ok wow...you're 12?? That's amazing! I don't ever remember my language being that advanced and intense! You've blown me away already. Great work, it flowed quite well! 5/5
keep on penning,
Dana

Ihate to think say this but I truley did not expect excellent poetry from a 12 year old( I truley am sorry that I even thought that now) I think this poem was awesome, there was a lot of emotion and thought in it. It truely was a great write,
-AnnMarie

Be sure to check out two of my poem as promised in the forum........

This is really sad and somewhat angry.
I love the imagery of the first 2 stanzas but I feel it loses it's momentum a little after that. I can certainly identify with the third stanza and th last gives it a good ending.

Very dark. you use great terminology and use of words that maximises the mental image. very powerful. very dark. loved it completely : D 5/5

Wow, you wrote this very well! It reminds me of something i'd write. Every line in the poem was flawless, and it flowed so perfect and naturally, great work on this, ill be sure to read more of your stuff!

--Steph

Eh, I really didn't enjoy this poem.. I thought it would be more about the devil, but it said nothing about him. Maybe by hidden meaning, but not in the poem. Plus you broke the rhyme and had bad formatting.

xDarkSuicidex 4.5