I luved this one..really
But I don't trust the words I speak.
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It's hard for me to understand;
To distinguish wrong from right.
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those lines were the best ;)
I hope u r okay
keep it up
Luv
NemO XxXxXxXxXxX

I luved this one..really
But I don't trust the words I speak.
===
It's hard for me to understand;
To distinguish wrong from right.
====
those lines were the best ;)
I hope u r okay
keep it up
Luv
NemO XxXxXxXxXxX

A simpler poem, but with a powerful message that I can relate to fully, as it is my own story in many respects. My favorite lines:

"Once a girl so proud and strong
Now lingers amongst the weak,
In dearest terms I'd say it's me,
But I don't trust the words I speak."

These lines where really good. I remember I was the strongest and most independent and caring child you could ever meet. I was social and could make friends with anyone, but now I look in the mirror and I don't even know who am anymore. This poem really touched me.

-Tainted Mikochan

Nice. Great use of self hate, to portray a very sad poem that I'm sure lies in the hearts of many people. In agreement,

Once a girl so proud and strong
Now lingers amongst the weak,
In dearest terms I'd say it's me,
But I don't trust the words I speak

Are by far the best lines - they really stood out to me, and I can relate so well.

Peace. [Sole]

Brilliantly written peice, the feelings are very powerfully expressed and the peice vey deep with a lot of thought within.

5/5

Your title was pretty good as it can draw a reader in alone. Your strongest line seemed to be this one:

But I don't trust the words I speak.

It presents an image of somebody who might be an innocent child who may know too much for their age or see too much to fall into this kind of depression. I think your first stanza was the weakest. It had everything there but it just seemed a bit out of it compared to the rest of the poem which did flow pretty good.

Wow
This poem had a story to tell and told it very well
short but the meaning was so powerful
i really loved it you did an amazing job.

Perfection has now become my curse,

Helluva line.

A, x

I'd choose a favorite stanza, but the ENTIRE poem, is absolutely amazing. i believe this could be published, i really do. you, are a great poet. all of the poem has emotion seeping through every word...keep it up.

This is such a sad poem, its true that we live in a hypociritical society that joins the dots and makes conclusions
I loved it, though it was unhappy I thought that it was a great poem :D
Keep writing :D

I love this! it has a nice flow...5/5. good job...keep up the good writing.

Once a girl so proud and strong
Now lingers amongst the weak,
In dearest terms I'd say it's me,
But I don't trust the words I speak.

That was such a good Stanza! I really liked the ending line too. It was all pieced together perfectly, and it had an excellent flow! 5/5

Fantastic flow and rhyming. Great emotions too

Great emotions in this one.. it really made me think....those are some of the best poems i read...nicly done!
~*Linz*~

This poem is really good. I love the meaning of it.

Wow! a fantastic piece lol!
a great feeling of depression can b felt in ur words........gr8 job

luv

Its a really great poem good job:)
I liked the metaphores..

Hey, that was good...i know wat you mean...but stay strong..everything will work out to itz best..you just and see... it did for me...
~Luv Alwayz Knoxy

I really have to say this says so much. i love your word choice great job keep it up!

Really good. u get your message across....