Good poem, excellent message. The only problem I have is that the rhyme scheme is kind of all over the place, and I cringe at bad schemes. Overall GREAT poem, I loved the emotion. My only advice is to work on the rhyming. (I'm not trying to bring you down, but in stanzas 1 & 2 you have a nice ABAB pattern...then you get further and in some cases it doesn't rhyme at all. Just try to stick to a scheme, or do a free verse.)
That was very nice, because it was very trusting.
I think friendship is beautiful because friends don't question each other, they learn to trust. So, thank you very much for sharing this poem with everyone. It was short, but soft and caring...
Wow-this is a really good poem- I love the topic about friendship. It is sad when a friendship ends-especially when you completely trusted them and they were your best friend. I like how you incorporated questions into the poem! 5/5
First of all, I'd like to say that I really loved this poem. It's definitely worth a 5/5. But now as to why it is worth that.
I liked the repetitive first line of each stanza "I would not ask you if" and then something to go with it... It was very well-written.
The flow was very good and your rhymes were not forced. This was a very original piece of literature and it made me sad... Because you describe how great this person was and it shows that this person meant a lot to you, but it ended somehow... So, I want to commend you on your portrayal of emotions.
My favorite stanza was the last one:
"I would not ask you, if
This is the meaning of true friend.
You were my best friend,
How did it all end?"
It really summed everything up and was a good ending. Good job!!
I always thought best friends would be there forever, I have lost friends and never understood why.. still to this day I don't understand how they could throw the friendship away.. it's sad but guess they weren't that good a friend in the first place.. another good poem xx