Comments : We Were Best Friends

  • 14 years ago

    by Joy

    Good poem, excellent message. The only problem I have is that the rhyme scheme is kind of all over the place, and I cringe at bad schemes. Overall GREAT poem, I loved the emotion. My only advice is to work on the rhyming. (I'm not trying to bring you down, but in stanzas 1 & 2 you have a nice ABAB pattern...then you get further and in some cases it doesn't rhyme at all. Just try to stick to a scheme, or do a free verse.)

    4/5

    joy*:.xx

  • 14 years ago

    by Goran Rahim

    Tnx joe,
    but the rhyme scheme is this poem is
    abcb
    it is not abcb
    that is why it look like the rhyme get messed up,
    but tnx a lot for the advise

  • 14 years ago

    by Truest Lies

    That was very nice, because it was very trusting.
    I think friendship is beautiful because friends don't question each other, they learn to trust. So, thank you very much for sharing this poem with everyone. It was short, but soft and caring...

    //T.L.//

  • 14 years ago

    by Arcane Blondie

    Wow-this is a really good poem- I love the topic about friendship. It is sad when a friendship ends-especially when you completely trusted them and they were your best friend. I like how you incorporated questions into the poem! 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Green M&M

    Good job on this one as well..........5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by gemowski

    This is a great piece really easy to relate to as i think we have all been in a situation like this in our lives.

    great work

    5/5 is what i rated it at.

    gema xoxo

  • 14 years ago

    by Tamra

    Once again you did a great job expressing your emotions and I really like that in a poem. 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by xxxxxxxxmary

    Aww.. I used to have abest friend.. but she turned into a BBBBBB.. lol nice one

  • 14 years ago

    by Sadly in love

    Very true....thanks for ur comment

  • 14 years ago

    by courtney

    Awwww that poems kinda sad but its good 5/5
    ~courtney~

  • 14 years ago

    by lexie

    I can really relate.i think its a wonderful poem.losing people is probly one of the hardest things to do ever.but i must say,you make some great poetry out of it :Dkeep it up
    --lexie

  • 14 years ago

    by ShhhhItsASecret©

    Goran,

    First of all, I'd like to say that I really loved this poem. It's definitely worth a 5/5. But now as to why it is worth that.

    I liked the repetitive first line of each stanza "I would not ask you if" and then something to go with it... It was very well-written.

    The flow was very good and your rhymes were not forced. This was a very original piece of literature and it made me sad... Because you describe how great this person was and it shows that this person meant a lot to you, but it ended somehow... So, I want to commend you on your portrayal of emotions.

    My favorite stanza was the last one:

    "I would not ask you, if
    This is the meaning of true friend.
    You were my best friend,
    How did it all end?"

    It really summed everything up and was a good ending. Good job!!

    ~BJ~

  • 14 years ago

    by Sweet MeMoRiEs

    Awesome poem :)

  • 14 years ago

    by struggling

    Wow this is like awesome.I know exactly how you feel friends can change right before your eyes.I Love It.Good job 5/5 poem.
    xoxostrugglingxoxo

  • 14 years ago

    by Megann Lee

    Awww. This one is kinda sad. I loved it though. Very well written.

  • 14 years ago

    by donna

    I always thought best friends would be there forever, I have lost friends and never understood why.. still to this day I don't understand how they could throw the friendship away.. it's sad but guess they weren't that good a friend in the first place.. another good poem xx

  • 14 years ago

    by Sarah Ann

    Wonderful poem. I can relate to it a lot. Losing a friend is truly heartbreaking. I understand exactly where you were coming from while writing this. Keep up the great work. xxx

  • 14 years ago

    by Mommy And Me

    Another poem i can conect to lol. the lay out it awsome and it gives a clear thought of what you are trying to say. super job :D

    ~Terra

  • 14 years ago

    by Robie Lincer

    That was a good written poem! very well written! very sad! and sorry the friendship had to end! keep ur head up all the time

    5/5

    keep it up!

  • 14 years ago

    by Emilyyy.

    This is a really good poem. im sure a lot of people could relate to it too. and it has really good structure. good job. my favorite.