The format of this poem is very unique! I dont think I`ve ever read a poem quite like it! This poem really got my attention and held it the whole way through. The story keeps the reader wanting to know what's going to happen----Great write--5/5

I loved the beginning but the ending got a little confusing for me....

Wow. im speechless. that was soo good.
it was sad but i loved it! it had a really grabbing story line and rhyms were great.
amazing write!

keep up the fantastic work

sophie:)

OMG!!!!!Wonderful,Amazing, Excellent...Wow....This is wow.....You are an absolute AMAZINg writer......Wow

I'm at loss for words.

Wow...excellent piece. 5/5

I realy like this poem and i am totally agree cutting is stupid but i am totally in love with this guy not you but anyway is it stupid to throw up over him?
please reply
**lonely1lyssa**

I think this is a really amazing story. No one can really capture the darkness of love like that. In the innocence of a diary. The contrasting emotions are wonderful and I thank you for your amazing work.

DAMMMN this poem was soo damn good!! true talent. 5/5. check out my poems if ud like. n dont stop writting ur real good.

erin

Name stealerer!!!! hehe
There, thats my excuse for stealing yours (even though i didn't ;)
But once again, being serious, excellent poem.
The diary format is brilliant and you did it justice =)
Love your work!
5/5 as always
*Gem*

Great Job. it was so sad, in the beginning i was thinking.. this is gonna be another dorky pimply teen love breakup poem. but u made it so much more.

a few things to wathc out for though-
forced rhymes. diary-wait and see?
sometimes its better to change the words.. not firce a rhyme.. it can throw everything off. and make it sound .. well. bad.

also. watch the syllable count! some lines (especially the last one in each stanza) were way to short.
try rereading over this and reading it exactly how its written. you'll see what i mean.

x3 Lauren

Loved the flow of it..... The end result was really sad and I hope it turns out better...

:'(