To tell you the true this poem is not that bad but, it;s not that good either work on your spelling.
just try to work on your rhyming more and before you submit it read it out loud and see how it sounds. not that i'm an expert but, i;m giving you my opinion.
if you want you can go check the work i've done too and also judge them ok.
bye
take care and keep up the writing ok.

Awww I love it