Wow, that was pretty gruesome. im not grossed out, im actually pretty impressed. all my gruesome ones i sugarcoated in metaphors and shit. great job!! 5/5 no contest.

Wow what a twist at the end...this was quite a graphic poem I have to say, you have a vivid imagination! But still very well crafted and written...good rhyming and rhyme sceme
Keep writing :D

A nice poem that is written so greatly. I really like the flow of the poem, great job
5/5

.. omg .. you're really good ;) great poem babe! 5/5 you deserve no less! again.. great job

fav stanza:
I give it to you
to make you complete
my life and my death
began to compete.
(u said you like advice, began .. try begin.. i think it sounds better but thats just me its still a great poem!)

I put back your heart
stitch it with care
staple it in hopes
it will remain there.

(My absolute FAVORITE line)

Amazing job... To me, there is no such thing as being 'too morbid'.. H*ll I've read darker before and loved it. But anyways, this was amazing. You wrote this beautifully and it's not like every other poem you read. Great job..

xDarkSuicidex 5.5

Oh my gosh! I LOVED this poem! Love Love LOOOVED it. Okay, I'm done obsessing. >.>

Anyways, I liked the who concept of it, and how you made it so gruesome. When you cut out your eye to complete his body was my favorite part. I thought the flow was amazing, as were your use of words!

Great job!

Cayce xx

Lovely. I don't think your trying to hard at all myself. Maybe try to write dark poems when your angry or upset and the descriptions might work out better for you. And the stanzas were short and choppy which is okay but if your going to go into gruesome detail maybe have them longer with more edge that would really help your poem here
5/5
kaila